Series: Success at the Core: Active and Exploratory Instruction


Common core State Standards

  • ELA:  English Language Arts
  • W:  Writing Standards 6-12
  • 7:  7th Grade
  • 5: 
    With some guidance and support from peers and
    adults, develop and strengthen writing as needed
    by planning, revising, editing, rewriting, or trying
    a new approach, focusing on how well purpose
    and audience have been addressed. (Editing for
    conventions should demonstrate command of
    Language standards 1-3 up to and including grade
    7 on page 52.)

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A Descriptive Writing Experience
Lesson Objective: Use sensory details to improve narrative writing
Grade 7 / ELA / Writing

Thought starters

  1. What can you learn from Mr. Allen's approach to teaching his students to show rather than tell in their writing?
  2. How do students' Oreo cookie descriptions change after they eat the cookies?
  3. How does the teacher encourage students to apply their learning from this lesson to their narrative writing?
Thank you for your new idea I like it and it is a new idea for the student to have such an experience
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Perhaps this lesson could have even been more excellent had the teacher given students an opportunity to speak with one another prior to writing about it.
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Hi Aaron...I tried this with my year 6 class and it worked wonders..they we engaged, they loved the idea and most of all, their descriptive writing of the oreo was gave me goosebumps....!!..this is such a simple yet such an effective way to get students to write rich texts...thank you for posting it...I look forward to more of these...:)
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I have found this lesson very helpful and will be using the ideas in one of my lessons.
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Wow.. impressive ! Already planned it for the coming writing lesson.. Descriptive writing ... thanks for ur idea sir...
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School Details

Shaw Middle School
4106 North Cook St
Spokane WA 99207
Population: 601

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Aaron Allen


Teaching Practice

All Grades / All Subjects / Collaboration

Teaching Practice

All Grades / All Subjects / Planning

Teaching Practice

All Grades / All Subjects / Engagement

Lesson Idea

Grades 9-12 / ELA / Tch DIY


Professional Learning


English Language Learners


English Language Arts